I feel your poem is quite literal and the poet is simply talking about what he is talking about: current events, race relations, to economics, religion, etc. However, I'd like to comment that your poem is trying to address too many topics with a language that is perhaps too specific for everything that is trying to be addressed. By language, I mean to say that it sounds very much like rap lyrics and I think the poet may benefit from trying to focus on fewer topics and more detail to them.
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